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Buffy Drabble

Title: LA
Prompt: Before (from still_grrr)
Characters: Buffy
Timeline: Becoming

Buffy scribbles down a note to her mother. Writing down her emotions isn’t second nature to her but talking about them hasn’t been either. But, she knows that her mom doesn’t want her around, her dad didn’t and he didn’t even know the truth.

She gets onto the bus, the driver narrows his eyes at her. She sees it on his face, that she’s just another girl running away, or trying to become a somebody in a city that will engulf her. “You ever been to LA before?”

“No.” She might as well starting lying before she gets to LA. 

Comments

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myfeetshowit
Mar. 1st, 2007 04:13 am (UTC)
In Anne, Joss and his writers did a great job of showing how Buffy felt she had nowhere to go but down, when she ran away. All her bridges were burnt, and the one girl alone in all the world was alone in a whole new way.

You did the same thing in 100 words.
aurey09
Mar. 1st, 2007 10:12 am (UTC)
Thank you. I wrote this in one sitting which now is a blur. I only had a few hours left before the challenge closed. So, I forced myself to write it. I'm glad it worked out.
scarlettlily
Mar. 1st, 2007 03:45 pm (UTC)
Wow that was amazing to see Buffy that way in only 100 words. Wonderful.
aurey09
Mar. 1st, 2007 10:04 pm (UTC)
Thank you. I'm hoping drabbles will have sharpen my writing skills.
stretfordditto
Mar. 1st, 2007 09:22 pm (UTC)
Excellent.
aurey09
Mar. 1st, 2007 10:00 pm (UTC)
Thank you.
shinodabear
Mar. 1st, 2007 11:01 pm (UTC)
She might as well starting lying before she gets to LA.

Fantastic line!
aurey09
Mar. 2nd, 2007 07:54 pm (UTC)
Thank you, I'm glad you liked the last line.
brencon
Mar. 1st, 2007 11:23 pm (UTC)
Loved it so much, really was what I thought Buffy would be thinking... she killed the love of her life, her mother had kicked her out....

Excellent
aurey09
Mar. 2nd, 2007 08:03 pm (UTC)
Thank you. Buffy was in a real bad place at the end of season 2 and that was what I wrote from.
hesadevil
Mar. 1st, 2007 11:23 pm (UTC)
I like how you take us from Buffy's inability to talk about her emotions to her decision to start lying in this.

Very well done.

Would you bring this over to gen_storyteller sometime soon?
aurey09
Mar. 2nd, 2007 08:25 pm (UTC)
Thank you. (Speaking of inabilities to talk. I had trouble answer a question during my interview, *headdesk* they seemed sympathetic and even gave me a moment to collect my thoughts - which did really happen after that. I've got to wait until Monday to see if I got the job.) I'm glad you picked up on those two points they were what held the drabble together. I came up with the lying part before the inability to talk.

Sure I'll put it on gen_storyteller.
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