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Drabbles: Anya, Clem and Harmony

These are my first three drabbles, so I'd really love to hear what anyone thinks.
Title: Introduction
Author: Aurey09
Rating: PG13
Character: Clem
Word count: 100 
Number: 1/100

“I’m not evil!” Clem held his arms up as Spike moved towards him. He’d heard things. He wanted to stay alive.

“I am.”

“Hey, I know where there’s this really cool poker game being held. I could get you in.”

Spike studied him.

“You’re Spike, right? I heard you were all about the fighting. Truth is, I’m not. Where’s the challenge in that?”

“Right? So what‘s the stakes.”

“Kittens.”

“What? You play for kittens?”

“They taste great… oh, living creatures. But you can always exchange them for money, if that’s your deal.” He held out his hand. “Name’s Clem.”


Title: Unappreciated
Author: Aurey09
Rating: PG13
Character: Anya
Word count: 100 
Number: 2/100

Ungrateful Bastards, it’s ‘Oh, Anya is human again, she’ll drop everything to help us.” - I don’t own them. Maybe Buffy - she’s saved my life a bunch of times but I helped to resurrect her, I don’t often mention that  because she get pissy about it.

I went home to change and here I am dutifully back. I took a key so I wouldn't have to break in - I’m considerate, if I broke a window Xander would only have to fix it, with his sexy tool belt, which would only lead to sexual frustration.

Why do I bother?


Title: Political Correctness
Author: Aurey09
Rating: PG13
Character: Harmony
Word count: 100 
Number: 3/100

Harmony marched into Angel’s office brandishing a booklet in her hand.

“I think we should start filling the water coolers with pigs’ blood.”

“What?”

“There’s not enough equal rights for vampires round here.” She couldn’t believe Angel’s lack of awareness. “They made me read a pamphlet, but there’s nothing about vampires - it needs updating.”

“We have Necro-tempered windows.” Angel tapped the glass.

“It’s a start.”

“Change is a slow, painstaking process.”

“Pain-staking! That’s like negative word for us.” She waited for Angel’s outrage to surface. He would normally have snapped at her by now. “Doesn’t it bother you?”

“No.”

Comments

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sl_podcast
Jan. 27th, 2007 03:42 am (UTC)
ROTFL... I love the painstaking... awesome. Great job... all of them seem to capture the characters... I love Clem.
aurey09
Jan. 27th, 2007 11:11 am (UTC)
I don't know where painstaking came from? - Angel's sense of humour kicked in. :-) I mock out of love.

I've not meet anyone who doesn't love Clem, except my mum, who frowns upon the whole kitten eating thing.
desdemonaspace
Jan. 27th, 2007 04:26 am (UTC)
Drabbles are hard--to capture a "moment" in an economical 100 words. (I tend to go on and on--I should write more, & hone the skill of brevity, which I sorely lack.)

These are very good drabbles. These are also my three favorite minor characters, and ones I've never written (except for an evil Angelus once, a couple years ago.) You did a fine job nailing each one's voice.
aurey09
Jan. 27th, 2007 11:01 am (UTC)
I like these characters too but then again I like most of Joss' characters. I'm going to be trying to write for as many different characters possible if I do any of these in the future.

I went on and on too and I think I should have come up with the title before the piece and given it a little more focus. Editing all these killed me. Thanks for taking the time to review.

lorelei_frolick
Jan. 27th, 2007 06:33 am (UTC)
These are great. I like how you have Spike and Clem meet, and that Clem was the one who brought him in to the poker game. :)

The equal rights for vampires is hilarious.

My only suggestions are that I think Anya's would be stronger if it was entirely told from the first-person - you'd be able to make the most of her unique and amusing voice that way.

Also, the dialogue for Clem's drabble could use a bit more punctuation.
aurey09
Jan. 27th, 2007 10:54 am (UTC)
I'm glad you liked them. I'm going to change Anya's to 1st person - I was wondering about it at the time.

I'll try and work on Clem's dialogue too - I'm not so good with the punctuation sometimes but I'll keep trying. :-)
blueanddollsome
Jan. 27th, 2007 08:00 am (UTC)
These are good. I think the Harmony one's my favourite. I think of all of them it's the most tightly focused on the one idea (vampire rights) which makes it good. And, of course, big with the funny.

You've really got all of the characters down pat, which is what makes reading these so enjoyable.

Drabbles are hard. I always go over 100 words.

aurey09
Jan. 27th, 2007 10:49 am (UTC)
Harmony's one was my favourite. I'm looking for a new job at the minuet and so that kind of thing will be waiting for me.

I had idea for a 100 drabbles challenge, all of them featuring a different Whedon 'verse characters. What do you think?

I was obsessed with everyone of them being exactly a 100 words.
blueanddollsome
Jan. 29th, 2007 02:53 am (UTC)
That sounds like a good idea. It would force you to write at least a little from every character's POV. A good exercise.
myfeetshowit
Feb. 2nd, 2007 01:01 am (UTC)
Some people allow 250 and 500 word drabbles but the purist insists on 100 words. No more, no less.

Of course, you can write a drabble set or go for 369ers.
shinodabear
Jan. 27th, 2007 03:28 pm (UTC)
*applause for your first three drabbles*
They were very nice. LOVED the blood in the water coolers. . . or would they have to be water warmers? :)
aurey09
Jan. 27th, 2007 03:55 pm (UTC)
Thank you for reviewing. Yep, they'd have to rename them water warmers... or blood warmers, ewww.
spuffyduds
Jan. 27th, 2007 11:40 pm (UTC)
Yay for you taking the drabble plunge--and with good stuff too! Painstaking was a hoot.
aurey09
Jan. 27th, 2007 11:52 pm (UTC)
Painstaking - who doesn't like that kind of mix up. I'm not sure if Angel would say that but he does have a sense of humour after all.
myfeetshowit
Feb. 2nd, 2007 01:02 am (UTC)
Drabbles are addicting. Both when it comes to writing them, and when it comes to reading ones that are as good as yours.
boy_named_susie
Feb. 3rd, 2007 06:42 pm (UTC)
Love the Harmony drabble. Equal rights for vampires - great stuff!
aurey09
Feb. 3rd, 2007 07:27 pm (UTC)
The Harmony one was really fun to write.
spankulert
Jan. 3rd, 2008 08:11 pm (UTC)
Yay, first take on Clem and Spike meeting/poker stuff. Really fits Spike.

The Anya one had me grinning though. You have her completely down.
aurey09
Jan. 3rd, 2008 10:12 pm (UTC)
Thanks. Anya's one of my favourite characters, so it's good to know I'm getting her voice right.
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